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Band 6.5

You are planning to stay at a hotel for a few days and would like to know more about the accommodation. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter: * ask for information about the types of rooms available and their prices * ask about the facilities provided by the hotel * ask about any other services available for guests

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Dear Sir, I am writing to enquire about room reservations and other facilities,
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 as restaurants and services. I would like to know the room sizes and costs, how many beds each room has, and what bathroom facilities are available.
In addition
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, is the meat halal? Do you serve seafood?
This
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 is because I'm allergic to chicken. I'd like to know whether you offer booking services that include airport transportation and luggage assistance.
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 is because I have joint pain. I want to mention that I need a maid and a servant during my stay at the hotel, because my mother is disabled. What is the hotel's rating? I want luxurious service, and money is not an issue. I look forward to your prompt, detailed response. Yours faithfully, Saif

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task response
Ask more clearly about room types, such as single, double, or family rooms. Also ask for the price for each room and the dates you plan to stay.
task response
The letter asks about food, travel, and help with bags well. However, use more polite words when asking for a maid or servant. You could ask for "care support" or "extra help" for your mother.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: rooms, food, extra help, then a close. Add a short opening with your stay dates and number of guests to make the purpose more complete.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each part. The food questions fit well together, but the hotel rating and luxury request could be put in a separate short part.
task response
You ask about all the main areas: rooms and prices, hotel facilities, and extra services.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and ending are polite, and your questions are easy to follow.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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