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Band 5.5

You recently saw an advertisement in a newspaper seeking volunteers to do unpaid work with local children. You are interested in this work. Write a letter to the head of the organisation. In your letter • express your interest • ask for details of the work that needs to be done • let them know when you are available.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my interest in your recent advertisement for unpaid volunteer
work
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 with local children in the newspaper. I want to request that you provide me with the details of the
work
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.
Such
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 as what the
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 is going to be and what the requirements
i
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 have to meet in order to
work
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 with the children. I would really appreciate it if you could share the location for the
work
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 with me so I can find available transportation. As I am a student, I am available on Monday, Tuesday, and Friday nights,
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 Saturday mornings and sometimes on Sunday afternoons. I am extremely excited to
work
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 with children. I am going to look forward to your prompt response. Let me know if you need any additional documentation from my end. Your regards, Gurjot
kaur
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task response
Say a little more about why you want to help children. You could also ask about the age of the children and the kind of help needed.
task response
Use a more formal ending, such as “Yours faithfully”, when you begin with “Dear Sir or Madam”.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: interest, questions, and free time. Make the second part flow better by using full questions instead of “Such as”.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each sentence clear and use correct capital letters, for example “I have to meet” and “I look forward to your prompt response”.
task response
You cover all the main points: your interest, the work details you need, and the days and times you are free.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs are easy to follow, and the list of your free times is clear.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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