You recently bought some clothes from an online store, but you are unhappy with your purchase. Write a letter to the company you ordered the clothes from. In your letter: • give details of your purchase • describe the problem • explain why you need an urgent replacement You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the recent purchase from your store in Vancouver on Aug 15th. I am graduating in 2 weeks and prefer your store because it stands out in quality and customer service. Considering that there is no branch available in Kelowna, I made an online
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that amounts to three hundred dollars that included a beautiful
dress
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. I am usually
a
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small in
size
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and
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my receipt clearly shows that I
order
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a
size
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S for the
dress
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.
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, I received a
size
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medium for it
which
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is quite loose
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I would not be able to wear it. If your staff had double checked the order, I would have received the right
right
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size
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.
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, now I am still unsure, I would be able to
received
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my
dress
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before graduation or not
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is quite inconvenient for me. I have already sent the items for an exchange for my original
size
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. As my graduation is in 2 weeks,
that
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it
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would be great if you could deliver the parcel as soon as possible so that I can wear the
dress
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. If not,
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please let me know so that I can arrange another
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for
me
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. I have enclosed a copy of my receipt for your reference. Thank you for your time and attention. Yours faithfully, Anchal Sharma

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Give the order number, the name of the dress, and the date it came. This will help the company find your order fast.
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State your main request more clearly: ask for a size S replacement to be sent by a set date.
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Say why the dress is needed for your graduation and give the exact date of the event.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear paragraph starts: one for the order, one for the wrong size, and one for your request.
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Make some long sentences shorter. This will make your meaning easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words such as “However”, “Therefore”, and “As a result” only where they show a clear link.
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You cover all the main parts: the purchase, the wrong size, and the need for a fast replacement.
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The reason for the urgent request is clear: you need the dress for your graduation.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end, with a polite closing.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraphs mostly follow a natural order, from the order details to the problem and request.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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