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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? Use specific details and examples to explain your view.

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Introduction
I totally agree that a
person
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 improve thier intellectual
skills
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 more when doing
group
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activities
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. From the
prospective
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perspective
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 of the psychologists , the concept "
intellegent
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intelligent
"
condsist
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consists
 of 3
elementa
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elements
: first , reading and writing
skill
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skills
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 related to
paper
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paperwork
work
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;
second,
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how
good the
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well
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 people can learn from
expericence
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experience
; third , how
good the
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 people make use
the
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 resources from the
enviroment
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environment
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Body paragraph 1
The
group
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activities
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 must contains the interations with different
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types
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 of persons
which
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is
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are
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 the
group
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 members. So in
this
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way
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 , the intellectual
skills
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 most likely will be improved by
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pratise
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practice
 more through
group
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activities
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Body paragraph 2
Group
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activites
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activities
 provide the opportunities to manage and understand different
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 of human being which is the perfect
way
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 to improves the intellegent. Every
person
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 have thier own personality and temper. Everyone have thier own experience and the
way
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 to
work
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even
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 to handle the same task. When we
involve
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are involved
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 in
the
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group
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work
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 , we have to
archieve
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achieve
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the
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people with different
thoughs
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thoughts
 and
abilitiese
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abilities
. It is the best
way
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 the
pratise
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skills
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understand
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understanding
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others's sights
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others' views
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 and
express the
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expressing
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 our own
ideal
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ideas
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 in a suitable
ways
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way
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. So that we can
persvade
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persuade
 others to keep the same
pacing
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pace
 together. The
commucations
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communication
skills
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equip
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 through the
group
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activities
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absolutly
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absolutely
 can
improves
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improve
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 our intellectual
skills
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Body paragraph 3
On the other hand
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 ,
group
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activities
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offen
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often
 allow us to handle the tasks in the
comparelly
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comparatively
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circumstandce
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circumstances
 which may help a
person
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 to
improves
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improve
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 their intellectual
skills
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. For most of the
requrment
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requirements
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 of the
group
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work
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 , they require the
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 members
finish
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to finish
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 the task together . At
this
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 point , to motivate the
group
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 mate may become
the
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 big part of the good
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The
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 mate may not be
a
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 open book to read
,
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 they may not
just
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simply
fowllow
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follow
 the
insstuction
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instructions
 in
own
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their own
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way
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this
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 point , the
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 member is part of the circumstance to
manage
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.
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Pratise
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Practice
 makes perfect. More the chance we practise the
umpresit
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important
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form
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from
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group
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member
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members
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,
more
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the more
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sulution
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solutions
 we have to find out , and
intellectual
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our intellectual
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skills
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are
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apply
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improve
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day
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day
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Conclusion
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,
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compared
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 to
maniplute
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manipulating
the task
individully
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individually
, the progress of doing
group
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activities
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require
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requires
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 a
person
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 to
pratise
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 communicaton skill and handle the
unceitain circumstand
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uncertain circumstances
. The
skills
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 we obtain from doing
group
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activities
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which
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 closely related to intellectual
skills
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 . It is quite obvious that intellectual
skills
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 will be improved by
do
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doing
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 more
group
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activities
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State your main view clearly, then give two clear reasons. Your view is clear, but some ideas about what “intellectual skills” means are not well explained.
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Use real and clear examples. For example, describe a team project where people share ideas, solve a problem, and learn from each other. This will make your points more strong.
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Explain why group work improves thinking skills, not only speaking skills. Show how group members can learn new ways to solve a task and make better choices.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each body paragraph. The first body paragraph can be about learning from other people. The second can be about solving new problems as a team.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words more carefully, such as “First,” “For example,” “As a result,” and “However.” Do not repeat “At this point” and “group activities” too often.
coherence and cohesion
Make the link between sentences clearer. Some sentences are very long and hard to follow. Write shorter sentences with one clear idea in each sentence.
coherence and cohesion
The ending repeats your view well. Make it stronger by briefly restating your two reasons in clear words.
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You give a clear opinion from the start and keep the same view through the essay.
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You include useful ideas about working with people who have different views and ways of doing things.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an ending.
coherence and cohesion
You try to explain each main point, rather than only listing ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • intellectual skills
  • group activities
  • collaborative learning
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication
  • interpersonal skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • creativity
  • individual study
  • personal reflection
  • autonomy
  • learning styles
  • approaches
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