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The charts below show the percentage of visitors from the USA to Canada in different age groups in 2000 and 2020. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The data illustrates the ratio of tourists from the USA to Canada in different
age
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 groups between 2000 and 2020.
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, it can be seen that people aged 35- 55
years
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people
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are more likely to travel, but they showed less
interest
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 in 2020.
Whereas
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, the least
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 was shown by the 16-24
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age
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 group in 2000
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 12% by the 25-34
years
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age
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 group in 2020. After analysing the pie chart, it is abundantly clear that, in 2000,
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 groups of 35-54
years
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 have hold 50% , which is half of the total visitors.
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 in 2020, it decreased to 35%.
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, 25-34
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 pupil shared 20% in 2000 and 12% in 2020, which shows slighlty decreased ratio over the period. On top of that, Juvinille have 10%
interest
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 in travelling in 2000.
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, early adulthood have percentage of 4% in 2000 , which increased to 15% in 2020.
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, older people have 16%
interest
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 that will increased upto 26% in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, years, interest with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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