The chart shows men and women proficient in a foreign language in several countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan.

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The chart shows men and women proficient in a foreign language in several countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows men and women proficient in a foreign language in several countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan.
The graph gives information about the wife and the guy who are good at different languages Reporting and comparing the relevant
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, the graph shows the period for females and male the wife at the period are more
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dude opproximately, but in general, gentlemen are fluctuating, and girls are going up China guy is just over 14
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on the other hand
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, the ladies are more than 28 In Romania,
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the average age of men
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is reached42, and females are above 63, and in Thailand, men are below 35, and women are falling back to around 28, but in India, dude dramatically increased to 56;
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, aunt rose significantly to above 63. In Russia, men fell back to 35, and women dropped slightly to more than 42. In Vietnam, men were slightly over 35, and women reached 56, so mother is going up and up before falling back dramatically, increased
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dropped back and
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going up again
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, bro are just fluctuating

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