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You should spend around 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported (in thousand tonnes) in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar graph shows four categories of citrus fruits and the top three countries to which these were exported in
thousand
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tonnes
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 in 2012.
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Overall
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Overall,
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 South Africa recorded the leading exporter of oranges at
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volume
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a volume
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 of 1000
thousand
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tonnes
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. The lemons and
others
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other
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 fruits
exported
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were exported
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 approximately 500
thousand
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tonnes
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 from
Mexico
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. The
grapefruites
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grapefruit
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 exported
volume
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 of 400
thousand
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tonnes
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 from Turkey. The exported
volume
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 of oranges from Egypt and
United
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the United
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States
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are
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is
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 450 to 500
thousand
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tonnes
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as
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, as
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 compared to South
Africa
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Africa's
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 relatively small figure. The United
States
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 and Argentina exported
lemons
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a considerable amount of lemons
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150
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, 150
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 to 200
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, a
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a considerable amount
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apply
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as compared to
Mexico
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. The grapefruits were exported by
Mexico
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 and
United
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the United
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States
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 at a
volume
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 of 200 to 300
thousand
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tonnes
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which
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, which
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 had similar levels compared to Turkey.
Although
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 Egypt and
United
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the United
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States
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 exported
smallest
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the smallest
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 quantity of other fruits as compared to
Mexico
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which
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, which
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showded
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showed
 a noticeable gap. The
overall
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 trend shows
United
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the United
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States
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 contributed
in
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to
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 all four types of citrus fruit exports.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thousand, tonnes, volume, mexico, states with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • citrus fruit exports
  • export destination
  • overseas market
  • in thousand tonnes
  • the largest share
  • the smallest quantity
  • the leading importer
  • the main recipient
  • export volume
  • a considerable amount
  • a relatively small figure
  • account for
  • exceed
  • be followed by
  • in contrast
  • respectively
  • a noticeable gap
  • similar levels
  • the highest proportion
  • overall trend
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