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You work for an international company. You have seen an advertisement for a training course which will be useful for your job. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter, *describe the training course you want to do *explain what the company could do to help you *say how the course will be useful for your job

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Dear manager, I came across
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this
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these
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 ads about
PMP
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the PMP
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 course.
Its
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It's
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 a globally
recognized
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recognised
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 credential offered by the Project Management Institute (PMI). I'm writing
this
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 because I'd want to take the course as it will be useful for my role. I'd understand better managing scope, time, budget, quality, risk, and resources on projects. It would be very helpful if the company
can
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 support me throughout the process, time and financially

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Add more detail about the course, such as how long it is, where it takes place, and what you will learn.
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Clearly say what help you need from the company. For example, ask for course fees and time off work.
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Finish the letter by saying how the course will help you do your work better.
coherence and cohesion
Use short paragraphs: one for the course, one for company help, and one for how it will help your job.
coherence and cohesion
Add a closing, such as “Yours sincerely,” and your name.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like “Also”, “For this reason”, and “As a result” to join your ideas.
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You clearly name the PMP course and explain that it is useful for your work.
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You give good examples of project areas you want to understand better, such as time, cost, and risk.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start and the main idea is easy to understand.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • training program
  • professional development
  • skill enhancement
  • course objectives
  • align with company goals
  • financial assistance
  • time off
  • employee investment
  • career advancement
  • knowledge acquisition
  • performance improvement
  • competitive edge
  • industry standards
  • up-to-date techniques
  • strategic value
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