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the line graph show the number of closing and opening in specific nation from 2011 to 2018

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The given data illustrates the
number
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 of shop closures and openings in a specific country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
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, it can be said that the
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 of closed
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 surged after 2016,
whereas
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 the
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 of opened
shops
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 considerably declined. After analysing the graph , it is abundantly clear that, in 2011, new
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 has 8500 rate and 6500 for old ones, respectively.
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, in 2012 and 2013, data reversed and opened
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, overtaken by closed ones with a 2000 margin.
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, both
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 had an equal
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 in the year 2014. After that closed
shops
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 substantially declined in 2015, with nearly 500 . But
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 the
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open
shops
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 had a slight deviation with 4500 numbers.
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 a surge was seen in closed
shops
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 in 2016 and neutral pattern was shared by open ones.
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, after 2017, open
shops
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 showed declining numbers
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 closed
shops
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 remain same

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "surged" was used 2 times.
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