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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The line graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of UK teenagers following a vegetarian diet between 1960 and 2020.
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, the
percentage
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 of UK adolescents following
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
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experienced
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diet experienced
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significant
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a significant
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fluctuated
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fluctuation over a
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over
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 60 years. Despite a sharp decline in the middle of
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the period
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, the
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 ended in 2020 dramatically higher
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figure
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started
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 in 1960. In 1960, the
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 of youngsters in
UK
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the UK
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 was zero
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percent
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per cent
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.
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figure
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 up 7.5
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percent
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 in 1970
and
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unexpected
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 peaked at roughly 16
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1980. In 1990, it dropped significantly
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by about
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 6
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percent
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.
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reach
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 its lowest point of 4
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percent
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 in 1997, despite a slight and minor recovery in numbers around 1993. The
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 teenager adopt a vegetarian diet
gradual
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gradually
 fluctuated about 5
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percent
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 in 2000. From
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 until 2010, the
figure
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 trending stedy rise to 11
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percent
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, doubling the
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 in 2000.
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,
this
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percentage
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 levels off at 11
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percent
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 until 2020.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, figure, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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