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the chart shows the average salaries of science and law graduates from UK universities five years after graduation. the table gives information on the annual tuition fees for international students studying these subjects now. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write atleast 150 words

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The bar chart shows and compares the average salary from two majors, five years after graduation. Correspondingly, the table shows the annual tuition
fees
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 for international students from both majors that
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 to be paid in a
five year
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five-year
 period. Looking at average salaries five years after graduation,
law
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graduates
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 earn more than
science
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graduates
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 at all three universities. Norchester
University
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 has the highest salaries, with
law
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graduates
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 earning around £48,000 and
science
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graduates
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 earning £42.000. At Russell
University
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,
law
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graduates
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 make £43,000
while
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science
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graduates
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 earn £39,000. The
University
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 of West Anglia has the lowest salaries, at £39,000 for
law
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 and £35,000 for
science
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. In terms of tuition
fees
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 for international students,
science
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 courses are always more expensive than
law
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 courses. Norchester
University
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 is the most expensive, charging £24,000 per year for
science
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 and £21,500 for
law
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. Russell
University
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 charges £22,000 for
science
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 and £20,000 for
law
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.
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, the
University
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 of West Anglia is the cheapest, with
science
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fees
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 at £20,000 and
law
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fees
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 at £19,000 per year.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fees, law, graduates, science, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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