The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.

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The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows the percentage of UK adolescents following a vegetarian diet.
The given chart displays
the
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how young
adult
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adults
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in the UK follows vegitarian meal between 1960 and 2020.
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,
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percentage
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the percentage
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of
vegitarian diat
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vegetarian diet
followers
were fluctured
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fluctuated
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over
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this
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these
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six decades. There were
up trends
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uptrends
, down treand
also
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steady periods during
this
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time. From 1960 to 1980,
vegetarian
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a vegetarian
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diet
were
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was
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more popular in
UK
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the UK
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. There was a clear
rose
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rise
from 0% to 15% over
the
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time. In
1980
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1980,
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this
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marked its
pinaccle
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pinnacle
and turned the
treand
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trend
downwards.
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Until
1993,
this
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declined from 8
percentage
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points
but
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, but
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in 1993 there were temperary climb of 2
percentage
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points
but
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, but
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this
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after one
year
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year,
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this
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drops till 5% in 1997.
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, after 1998 there were slight
rose
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rise
over
the
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time
unless
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until
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1999. But after 2000 to 2012
percentage
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grows from 6% to 12%. After 2012
overall
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trend
reamain
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remained
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unchanged without major updowns untill 2020

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percent
  • percentages
  • teens
  • teens's? (ignore)
  • not eat meat
  • eat meat
  • diet
  • rise
  • increase
  • growth
  • fall
  • decrease
  • change
  • over time
  • period
  • year
  • years
  • overall
  • trend
  • data
  • graph
  • show
  • people
  • in the UK
  • health
  • healthier
  • care for animals
  • environment
  • family
  • friends
  • school
  • media
  • reason
  • cause
  • perhaps
  • maybe
  • more
  • less
  • some
  • many
  • few
  • almost
  • nearly
  • significant
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