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The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.

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The line graph shows the percentage of New Zealand population from 1950 to 2050.
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illustrates
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 New Zealand
population
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 growth and
futhure
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future
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differnent
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different
age
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 groups over a century
starting
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, starting
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 from 1950.
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,
highest
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the highest
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 percentage of peopole reoceds from
age
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over
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group over
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 65
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while
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, while
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 younger
age
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people
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upto
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up to
 0 to 37 were
record
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recorded as having
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 the lowest share
form
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 total
population
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. In 1995
population
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 over 38 reached its peak
while
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age
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the age
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 between 0-14
experianced
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experienced
 its lowest.
People
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 who
over
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are over
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age
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 65
had
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made up
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 60
percent
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per cent
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 of
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form
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the
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population
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. This grew
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this
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 was grown gradually till 1995 marked its
pinnacle
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peak
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 of 65%
and
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, and
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 start decline. In 2050
population
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 of over 65 will be
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predicted to be
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 around 50% from total
population
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, which
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this
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 will be the lowest record of
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population
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the population
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 of that
age
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 group. Sametime
people
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form
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aged
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 38-45
also
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were
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showed steap increment starting from 23% in 1950 and reached its peak
on
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in
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 1995 with 45 % of dencity
form
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 total
population
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,
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nevertheless
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nevertheless,
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this
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start
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started to
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 decline after that and recorded 35% in 2005.
Afther
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After
this
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 period whis number stayed around 33-38 %. and will
be
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predict
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this will remain the same figures
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that these figures will remain the same
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 in 2050. Younger
age
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 groups always remain the lowest
by
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compared to elder genarations.
People
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age
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aged
 between 25
to
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and
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 37 accounted for 20%
form
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 total and reached 22% in 1965.
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 was the highest ever record of
this
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 genaration and after that
this
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age
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 group became decline. In
2005
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2005,
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 both younger
genaration
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generation
 groups shared the same
precentage
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percentage
.
However
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age
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 group between 0-14 will be
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predicted to reach
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 its highest in 2050
and
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, and
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age
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the age
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between
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group between
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 25- 37 will
be
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reach its lowest of 2% from
population
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, people, form with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuating trends
  • Projections
  • Percentage
  • Demographic changes
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Stable
  • Increase/Decrease
  • Growth/Decline
  • Patterns
  • Historical context
  • Population dynamics
  • Trends
  • Significant shifts
  • Peaks and troughs
  • Forecasts
  • Projections
  • Analysis
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