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In today's job market, it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future job applicants may not need any formal qualifcations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
With the increase of competition in today's job market, a vast number of people have come
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to the conclusion that, in order to be employed, having applied skills in the field is more crucial than conceptual ones.
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 I agree with the importance of hands-on experience, I
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 opine that the
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 of abstract understanding is vital too.
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It is undeniable that, to perform tasks that require technical capabilities, we must
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 have assumed knowledge, as it becomes almost impossible to handle problems and questions that are unfamiliar. Which is why
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 most employers demand a background with a university degree
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 skills.
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, engineers who are thought to be highly skilled in their expertise
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 need equivalent information in their domain. If a chemical engineer wants to create soaps from petroleum, without the academic knowledge of their chemical formulas and reactions, it would take countless experiments
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 being skilled and having hard abilities define most professions, there
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 still a huge demand for academic understanding, as they assist with the implementation of
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State your view more clearly in the first part. Say if you agree, disagree, or agree only in part. Then keep this same view in every body part.
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Answer both parts of the question. Explain why work skills matter, and explain whether school papers may still be needed in the future.
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Add one full body part about practical skills. For example, say that workers can learn by doing, and give a job where this is useful.
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Your main idea about study knowledge is useful, but explain it in more detail. Show how it helps people solve new or hard problems.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: first part, practical skills; second part, theory and school papers; last part, your final view.
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Do not leave a one-word paragraph such as “Admittedly”. Put it at the start of a full paragraph, then explain the point.
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Make each paragraph start with one clear main idea. Then add reasons and an example that directly support that idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links between ideas, such as “First”, “Also”, “However”, “For example”, and “Therefore”. Do not use long sentences with many ideas joined together.
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You give a clear example about a chemical engineer. It shows that study knowledge can save time and money.
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You understand that both work skills and theory can be important.
coherence and cohesion
Your first and last parts show the same main view: practical skills matter, but theory also has a place.
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The essay has a beginning, a main part, and an ending, which helps the reader follow it.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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