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Many companies now conduct job interviews online rather than meeting candidates face-to-face. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Introduction
In recent years, there has been a growing trend toward online
interviews
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. Numerous individuals considered unclear results as a disadvantage of
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 shift,
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 others argue that it is more convenient than face-to-face meetings.
Body paragraph 1
On
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 hand, a prime benefit is that it may be more convenient for candidates.
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 is because
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 the latest method,
people
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 used to travel for long hours and spend a huge amount of money in order to attend an interview.
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, when
people
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 online
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, they will save money and effort.
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, a
candidate
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 can feel free of pressure when he makes the interview from home.
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 is primarily because face-to-face meetings can increase
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people
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 stress levels, which may have a detrimental effect on their performance.
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, a recent study in the US indicates that
people
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 tend to have lower stress levels in online
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.
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, one significant drawback of
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 shift is that online
interviews
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 may not give clear results.
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, when an interviewer cannot see a
candidate
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 closely, he may not be able to test the
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candidate
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 confidence.
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 skill plays a crucial role in the
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's
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, which may not be tested because of the online interview conditions.
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, by interviewing face-to-face with a
candidate
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, the company will be able to decide whether
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the candidate
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 is qualified or not. To give a clear example,
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 survey has taken
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place in big tech companies highlights that the vast majority of CEOs are dissatisfied with workers who joined the companies
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 an online
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interview
.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
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 attending online
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 may be more convenient for an increasing number of candidates, a main drawback of
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 trend is that it gives
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unrealistic
 results.

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Answer both parts in a more even way. You explain the good points well, but the bad points need more clear detail about why online talks can lead to a wrong choice.
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Make your main ideas more exact. For example, say that poor sound, a bad internet link, or less body language can make it hard to judge a person.
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Use examples that are clear and true. The US study and the survey of tech leaders are not explained enough. You can use a simple general example instead, or give more detail about the study.
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Be careful with ideas about confidence. A company can test confidence in an online talk too. Explain why it may be harder, rather than saying it cannot be tested.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part shape: start, good points, bad points, and end. Keep this shape, but make the first paragraph state both sides more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
Use links between ideas more smoothly. Some phrases, such as “In other words,” repeat ideas instead of adding a new point. Use them only when you really explain the idea in a new way.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main point in each paragraph. In the second body paragraph, focus on one clear problem, such as the lack of direct contact, then explain it and give one example.
coherence and cohesion
Check word form and small grammar points because they can make the meaning less clear: “people’s stress levels,” “a recent survey,” “has taken place,” “online interview,” and “unrealistic results.”
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You answer the full question by giving both good and bad points about online job interviews.
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Your good point about saving time, money, and effort is clear and directly linked to job interviews.
coherence and cohesion
The body paragraphs are easy to follow because you use clear signs such as “On one hand” and “On the other hand.”
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The ending returns to both sides of the topic and gives a clear final view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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