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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts illustrate why
students
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 of different ages choose to
study
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 and the amount of
support
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 they receive from their employers.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
students
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 studying for
career
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a career
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 is decreasing with their age growth,
while
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 the
number
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 of
people
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which
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who
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study
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 for interest grows when they become older, and the employer
support
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 represents a reversed triangle, with the decrease of
support
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 till some age and its growth afterwards. Starting from 80
students
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 under 26, who chose to
study
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 for a future career, their
number
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fall
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fell
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 to 70 in 26-29, with
the
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a
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 constant decrease
down
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apply
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to less than 20
people
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 over 49.
On the other hand
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, starting from 10
people
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 under 26, who
study
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 for interest, the
number
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 is growing to 70
people
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 over 49.
Furthermore
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, the same
number
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 of
people
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 aged from 40 to 49 years old chose to
study
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 for
career
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a career
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 and for
interests
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their interests
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. Employers'
support
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, which is calculated based on time off and the amount of time spent helping with
fees
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fees,
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 ranges from more than 60 for
students
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 aged under 26 and
is decreasing
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decreases
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 to approximately 32 for
the
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apply
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students
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 from 30 to 39.
However
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, starting from that period, the
number
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is
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has
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 constantly
grows
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grown
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 up to about 45 for
students
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 over 49.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, study, support, number, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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