Some countries spend a lot of money to make bicycle usage easier. Why is this? Is this the best solution to traffic congestion?

Some countries allocate so much money to make
bicycle
usage easier. Countries like Japan even build advanced technology for
bicycle
parking. Some factors that lead to
this
issue are high rate
traffic
congestion, widespread
air
pollution
, and decreasing provision of
crude
oil
. In my opinion,
traffic
congestion is the primary issue of why bicycling is embraced. Referring to where I live,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
around 15 km distances can consume around 2 to 2.5 hours on a busy workday, while it merely needs around 30 to 40 minutes in
uncongested
traffic
. Many people aim
to
Suggestion
in
the same direction,
for instance
, the central business areas,
this
is where mass public transports like bus and train can be helpful. People can take buses or trains and
then
take a walk or ride a
bicycle
to go to their workplaces from the train or bus station. Another reason why bicycling is embraced is because of the
air
pollution exhausted
Accept comma addition
pollution, exhausted
from
engine
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the engine
-based vehicles like cars and motorcycles. The
air
pollution
caused by
those
plural of "this"
these
vehicles is harmful to pedestrians and others who live in the areas with a lot of
traffic
congestion. Researches have shown that
air
pollution
can cause a range of diseases from
eyes
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eye
irritation, asthma, to lung cancer. Limitation of
crude
oil
provision
also
brings a significant impact on
this
issue.
Crude
oil
as the only prominent source of energy for
engine
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the engine
-based vehicles
is deteriorating
Suggestion
are deteriorating
in term of its quantity. Other sources like electricity are still in the development phase before it can be widely used as a substitute for
crude
oil
.
This
cause the price of
crude
oil
to always increasing. Some countries even have to subsidize it, to make their economics keep running well, but after all plenty amount of money is needed to subsidize and make the economy hard to raise. In conclusion,
bicycle
riding is part of the solution for those problems stated above, but it has to be supported with other public transports
such
as bus or train. It is
also
more efficient if the government can prepare bicycles for
rent rather
Accept comma addition
rent, rather
than each person has to bring their bicycles.
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