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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

#salary #job #satisfaction
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There is a common belief that the job satisfaction comes secondary when compared to a big salary. I don’t agree with the statement, satisfaction on the
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 is key to the happiness in anyone’s life. Income is
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 a vital aspect, but it can never supersede the importance of love towards the
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. Employees spend
lot
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a lot
lots
 of time at the
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 location rather than at a home, if they do not love job that they are doing,
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 every day is going to be a stressful day. Job satisfaction and salary are directly proportional to each other, if you love the
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, you will be good at it and if you are good at what are doing, you will be able to earn big. Let us consider the Indian cricketer Dhoni as an example, he was from a
middleclass
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middle class
 family and was working as a railway clerk before playing the professional cricket. He is one of the most successful players ever to captain the Indian cricket team and he is now one of the richest athletes in India. Doing the
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 that we don’t like is quite tough and stressful, it affects the psychological
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of a person. Health is wealth, no amount of money can give you happiness if you are not healthy. Many successful personalities in the history chose the career path that they felt passionate and loved, money followed them later. To conclude, happiness has a paramount importance in
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everyone's
 life, we should do whatever it takes to make ourselves happy and satisfied, whether it is a job or anything else in the life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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