Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Although
, many people believe the increment in the university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment.
However
, I think in reverse manner and I strongly disagree
to
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with
the above statement. My inclination is justified in the following paragraphs.
First
of all, subjects like philosophy and history are equally important to any other practical degree course. In an economy or country everyone cannot be doctors and engineers, but we need qualified personnels from other different fields as well to scale up the economy.
For instance
, In India the number of engineers
have increased
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has increased
had increased
to an extent that it is very difficult for the country to provide jobs
to
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for
all of them.
Hence
, there has been a decline in the wage rate as well as in the demand of the course.
Therefore
, it is extremely essential to have people from all the fields for the growth of a country.
Secondly
, the chances of employment of any individual
solely depends
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solely depend
upon one's dedication and determination. The universities should
work
with students and make them capable enough to
work
as
free lancers
a writer or artist who sells services to different employers without a long-term contract with any of them
freelancers
or
work
for themselves rather than working for others and searching for jobs.
For example
, many
writters
writes (books or stories or articles or the like) professionally (for pay)
writers
readers
write for themselves rather than working for someone else, many become successful in their respective fields by enhancing their skills and they even hire people from their field to
work
for them.
Therefore
, the chances of employability can be increased by other methods as well. To recapitulate, I reckon that all fields have their own necessity and jobs can be created by giving more emphasis on the foundation of the student, who opt their career in these fields.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural literacy
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual growth
  • preservation of culture
  • problem-solving skills
  • ethical reasoning
  • market unpredictability
  • innovation
  • holistic education
  • globalized world
  • historical contexts
  • multicultural environments
  • public service
  • media and arts management
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