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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Although
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, many people believe the increment in the university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history and only offer practical degree courses that maximize chances of employment.
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, I think in reverse manner and I strongly disagree
to
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with
 the above statement. My inclination is justified in the following paragraphs.
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 of all, subjects like philosophy and history are equally important to any other practical degree course. In an economy or country everyone cannot be doctors and engineers, but we need qualified personnels from other different fields as well to scale up the economy.
For instance
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, In India the number of engineers
have increased
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has increased
had increased
 to an extent that it is very difficult for the country to provide jobs
to
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for
 all of them.
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, there has been a decline in the wage rate as well as in the demand of the course.
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, it is extremely essential to have people from all the fields for the growth of a country.
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, the chances of employment of any individual
solely depends
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solely depend
 upon one's dedication and determination. The universities should
work
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 with students and make them capable enough to
work
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 as
free lancers
a writer or artist who sells services to different employers without a long-term contract with any of them
freelancers
 or
work
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 for themselves rather than working for others and searching for jobs.
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, many
writters
writes (books or stories or articles or the like) professionally (for pay)
writers
readers
 write for themselves rather than working for someone else, many become successful in their respective fields by enhancing their skills and they even hire people from their field to
work
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 for them.
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, the chances of employability can be increased by other methods as well. To recapitulate, I reckon that all fields have their own necessity and jobs can be created by giving more emphasis on the foundation of the student, who opt their career in these fields.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural literacy
  • critical thinking
  • intellectual growth
  • preservation of culture
  • problem-solving skills
  • ethical reasoning
  • market unpredictability
  • innovation
  • holistic education
  • globalized world
  • historical contexts
  • multicultural environments
  • public service
  • media and arts management
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