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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff all the times, even on holidays. does this development have more advantages than disadvantages?

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The days with 9AM to 5PM jobs are almost gone, many corporations expect their employees to be available at every minute of the day, even on the weekends and the holidays.
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 trend is not the best way forward, it has more disadvantages
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then
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than
 benefits. One of the main downsides for the employee is the
work
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 life balance, long working hours will have a significant impact on the family life, there are many instances in which family relations were ruined.
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 disadvantage is the
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health
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healthiest
, 24x7 availability to the employer will lead to significant increase in the stress levels, bad family
relations combined
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relations, combined
 with long
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 hours will have a devastating impact on the mental and physical
health
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 of the employee.
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, in one of the companies that I worked, tight deadlines and lengthy
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 times caused a major
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 hazard to the employees, many of them in my team were diagnosed with the diabetes at an early age. There are few advantages, if the employees can dedicate
significant amount
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a significant amount
significant amounts
 of time to the company, issues and challenges can be resolved
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in
with
 time and the organization will be able to grow faster and can meet the predefined targets. Many billionaires endorse
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 working culture,
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, the CEO of Alibaba private limited asked employees to
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 12 hours a day and 6 days a week to meet the company targets. Alibaba is now one the biggest
corporates
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 in the world. To conclude, all the companies must give paramount importance to the wellbeing of the employees. The mental and physical
health
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 of the workforce is directly proportional to the productivity. The cons clearly overweigh the advantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Constant connectivity
  • Workplace availability
  • Crisis management
  • Decision-making
  • Competitive edge
  • Prompt response
  • Flexibility
  • Autonomy
  • Remote work
  • Work-life balance
  • Stress
  • Burnout
  • Personal time
  • Discontent
  • Morale
  • Productivity
  • Proper delegation
  • Team trust
  • Employee well-being
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