Some people work for the organization all their working life.others think that ot is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinions.

We often witness, some people working in an same concern until their retirement.Whereas others tend to change their
work
environment regularly, to explore various opportunities. Some people
work
in same concern, as of being traditional thinkers, who are pretty hesitant to explore other opportunities. Many factors
such
as friendly management, healthy
work
space environment- tend to retain them to these concerns. Seeking
this
as an opportunity, many concerns are manipulating these employees, by increasing their workload and under-paying them.For
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at past
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cotton mills were present in and around India.Many people worked
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in
these mills were either under-paid with increased workload until retirement. But the economic recession in 1995,
withnessed
be a witness to
witnessed
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-down of these mills. Many employees didn't receive pensions
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of having a service span of more than 30 years.
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hand, many
employees nowadays, doesn't retain in an same company for
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a
decade. They keep on exploring other concerns, owning to better salary features and promotional offers.
This
has enabled many employees to reach heights in
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an explored
unexplored
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field
fields
. A survey stated that 90% of employees often change their
work
space to explore and integrate. To conclude
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in my opinion,
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it is
it's
better to explore with various organizations, to gain better knowledge and
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