employers sometime ask people applying for a job personal information such as hobbies and interests and whether they are married or single.some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. others disagree.

As
being
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
been
developing and competitive in business field, employers has rife a new trend while interviewing
an
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a
new employee, the perfect amalgamation of professional and personal skills or hobbies with marital status is being selected. While some people take it as conspicuous whereas other mark it as irrefutable
.
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.
To start with an assent many managers
ask
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asks
the employees to mention their interests and hobbies with marital status, as it is being in trend to celebrate the various events just for the sake of marketing
,
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,
for
instance as
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instance, as
many companies and
organisations celebrates
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organisations, celebrates
their annual day and weeks by organising various events, so people get aware about the product and business field.
However
,
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,
According to an empirical survey
this
is being revealed that unmarried people take less vacation and are more assiduous towards their work
Although
, some of the population is being irrefutable; people
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
or get the
job
opportunities because they mention their personal details as being
divorce
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divorced
,
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,
widower and lower cast with the results that, people got the
job
on the basis sympathetic
act
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act, hence
hence
for instance
,
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,
in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
this
is being recorded in the national law of constitution about the
weightage
a season's yield of wine from a vineyard
vintage
witch
and
particular more number
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a particular number
particular number
particular most number
of seats in the jobs for lower
casts
pecuniary reimbursement to the winning party for the expenses of litigation
costs
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divorces and widowers. The homosexual has no number of seats in any field and if it mistakenly revealed people make
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funny comments
a funny comment
on the community
un
located at or attached to
on
in
till they would not quit from the
job
or commit suicides In conclusion
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,
job
selections should be non biased and equal for all the communities
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Personal information should be optional before an interview and should be kept confidential if the employee do want to disclose
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,
job
selection should be on the basis of experience and professional skills.
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