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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There's no doubt that rising living standards have benefited our social life,
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, it
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 fuels several severe
environment
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 matters typical of which is
climate
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change
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.
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climate
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change
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 has long been known as heated topic, who is going to tackle that serious problem is still remained controversial. Some individuals hold the idea that developed countries should take the lead in facing
climate
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change whereas
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change, whereas
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responsibility
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 should be equal
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in
 all countries. Before presenting
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, the following essay will
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consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
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 both viewpoints. More specifically, that developed nations should take higher
responsibility
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 when it comes to protecting the
environment
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 is reasonable, in terms of various resources and less pressing
concerns
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concern
. It is apparent that the strength of
developed country
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a developed country
developed countries
 in protecting the
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environment mostly
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environment, mostly
 come from the Scientific Technology
Resouces
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Resources
, particularly recycling factories, electric cars which served as fruitful infrastructure for
comating
an engagement fought between two military forces
combating
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change
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. Due to the fact that the general living standards in developed nations are quite more stable compared to developing countries,
government
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the government
 will put more emphasis and effort on solving
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 issues especially
climate
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 changed without
distractors
mental turmoil
distractions
detractors
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, it is understandable that
climate
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change
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 needs to be solves
globally
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global
. As we know, the
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 in global
climate
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 is one universal problems suffered from citizens all over the world,
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 why all nations should contribute to solve it. Only when both developed and developing countries are willing to join hands, shared massive duties related to mother earth, they can win over the
climate
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change
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 battle From my perspective, I strongly advocate with the viewpoint that
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 in
climate
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 should be taken equally due to its global scale. The consequences of
climate
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 are always in front of our eyes no matter where we live and study so why don't we take
responsibility
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 and solve it together but passing the buck
for
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 the others. Because it is a universal matter, solution from numerous forces will be more efficient In a nutshell, developed countries should set examples in protect Mother Nature regarding is resouces and pressing concerns, responsibilities on Earth should be shared equally because of its global nature
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