The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
The diagram graph shows
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the reponsibilities
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reponsibilities
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responsibilities
of
maried
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married
people
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people's
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weekly
chore
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chores
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by gender,
child
number
and
hours
. A glance at the graph
reveal
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reveals
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that
growing
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the growing
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child
number
has
effect
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an effect
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on
work
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the work
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time
of families.
Firstly
, The graph illustrates
female
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females
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gender are more activities than
men
. First diagram work
time
is
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a totally
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totally
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total
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50
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of 50
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hours
which is without children. The male gender works under 20
hours
,
while
female
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the female
a female
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is 30
hour
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hours
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in
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apply
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a week. As
size
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the size
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of
family
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the family
a family
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is growing
such
as 1-2
child
,
the
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apply
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women
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women's
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work
time
increase significantly
over
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by over
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50
hours
than
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more than
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men
do. The
third
graphs
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graph
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shows which is over 3
child
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children
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the
females
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female's
females'
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chore peak at 60
hours
.
However
,
men
do not have
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the reponsibilitiy
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reponsibilitiy
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responsibility
responsibilities
care
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to care
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of
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for
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the child
a child
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child
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children
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.
In contrast
,
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a
the
show examples
number
of working
time
is
least
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the least
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, as
growing
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the growing
show examples
child
number
. In short, when the family get a
child
, the women
passing
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pass
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more
time
than
men
do.
Moreover
,
men
does
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do
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not have
resposibility
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responsibility
about
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for
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child
care, all chore and other activities were
incured
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incurred
by women.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words child, number, hours, time, men with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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