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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Other thinks that face-to-facec interaction is essential. Discuess both view and give your opinion.

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Some would argue that, it is good to make new friends through social networking sites. While others say one-on-one interaction is very much important to judge a person.
Although
, social media platform is meant
for connecting
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for, connecting
 people and making new friends even beyond countries.
However
, I believe meeting somebody personally and having
chating
a thin layer covering something
coating
cheating
 creates a magic in becoming genuine friendships. On the one hand, these day people spend most of their time on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 to work or study. So it is
obvious
Suggestion
obviously
 a kind of relief to make new friends through these online platforms. One of the fascinating things about these platforms
are we
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are, we
 got to know other countries cultures by connecting with them.
For example
, through
Facebook social site
Suggestion
the Facebook social site
, many people meet from all over the world. Getting to know each
othere
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
others
 and their culture. But, I believe meeting someone personally get to know very well.
On the other hand
, true friends know about our feeling because it
canhappen
Suggestion
can happen
 only through personal conversation. By meeting and talking to someone comes to know about person aura and
geniunity
.
For instance
, Indian actor
salman
Suggestion
Salman
 khan applied online for a movie role to a production company he got rejected. But, when he met with the production head personally,
then
 the
proudcer
someone who manufactures something
producer
producers
 came to know the real talent. To conclude, I believe true friendship is only possible through
geniune
not fake or counterfeit
genuine
 face to face interaction,
instead
 of virtual friends because you can’t trust.
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