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While recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

#employee #employer #attention #qualities #qualifications
should
Suggestion
Should
 the business owner give personal attitudes more importance than other skills that are related to the work itself while employing a new employee?
if
Suggestion
If
give
Suggestion
given
 personal skill more attention than
other
Suggestion
the other
 ->
this
 could
emplyee
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
employ
imply
some one
a human being
someone
 who has nice attitude but bad tech skills,
this
 will make the development
proceess
a particular course of action intended to achieve a result
process
processes
proceeds
 in the company much slower because he will need more time to learn things or to apply his knowledge.
if
Suggestion
If
give
Suggestion
given
 technical skills more attention than other skills, could
employe
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
employ
imply
employed
some one
a human being
someone
 with bad communication skills and have
bad attitude
Suggestion
a bad attitude
bad attitudes
 -> even they have an outstanding working
skills but
Accept comma addition
skills, but
 they will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 the process of the work by their negative communication skills and behave awfully with their colleagues which will slow the development and make problems in the company
as a result
 not
healthy environment
Suggestion
a healthy environment
.
Suggestion
Have
 have a bal
ance bew
internal to, involving members of (a group of people)
between
tween
all s
an ability that has been acquired by training
skills
kilss so that he can benefit from his skills and
the em
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
plyee can join the
team wi
in absence of
without
htout a problem
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