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Some people think that there are things individuals can do to help prevent global climate change. Others believe that action by individuals is useless and irrelevant and that it is only governments and large businesses which can make a difference. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Climate
change
 is a phenomenon affecting all people in all walks of life, from individual citizens to whole countries and huge multinational companies. The question of what we can do to prevent global
climate
change
 and whether individual
action
 is effective or not is a hotly debated issue. There are those who say that the majority of the
damages
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damage
 is wrought by big businesses. By imposing restrictions on emissions and by strictly monitoring waste disposal from factories, plants
and businesses, governments
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, businesses and governments
 would go a long way towards preventing
climate
change
. It is thought that governments around the world should come up with solutions to help prevent imminent
environment
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environmental
 disaster. Proponents of
this
 view claim that individual
action
 is irrelevant in the face of massive, wide-scale prevention policies set and controlled by governments.
On the other hand
, there are a growing number of people who believe that individual
action
 combined with governmental and business
action
 will do a lot more to prevent
climate
change
 than if individual citizens were not involved. In a world of six billion people, if everyone thought about the
number
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amount
 of water they use, how they dispose of their rubbish, whether or
not something
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not, something
 needs to be thrown away or if they can, in fact, re-use certain items
then
 we would be giving the problem of
climate
change
 and its prevention a massive boost. Taking both points into consideration, I firmly believe that individual citizens cannot sit back and say it is someone else’s responsibility to protect the environments; we must all play our part-individual citizens, governments and big businesses alike.
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