In countries where there is a high rate of unemployment, most students should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who have no hope of finding a job. Do you agree or disagree ?

Is relevant and true the affirmation that there is a lack of employment in some countries. These
fact
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facts
is
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are
possible thought many factors, but does not need to be
associate
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associated
with the level of
education
of the population. The economy, politic and wealth of
a
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an
individual country
should be investigate
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should investigate
should be investigated
as a primary cause of unemployment, and for that reason, it should be changed and improved. On my own point of view,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
disagree with the
fact
that only the primary
education
should be provide
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should be provided
for the students. In
fact
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
beliave
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that the
education
is the main way to reduce the lack of
job
opportunities, because it helps to create a better society, with higher levels of information and
knowloge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
. The politics
estragegies
may need to be changed to offer more placements for students,
pherabes
influenciating
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influencing
and
incentivating
them to follow a professional career, with more rates of salary, good conditions of work and more chance to improve
economiclly
with respect to economic science
economically
in life. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
defend the
fact
that the secondary
education
helps the
population offering
Accept comma addition
population, offering
them a better service,
for example
in the medical field. As a dentist,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
need to confirm that the highest level of
education
, the highest quality of the service offered to a
pacient
a person who requires medical care
patient
. The concern about not find a
job
should be replaced
to
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with
the question: how can the government
amplifie
job
opportunites
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
? I would say that the solution is change the mentality of the students making them more
holpfull
providing assistance or serving a useful function
helpful
and generate more space for the
youngs
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young
ones to find a
job
that is
similar with their
expectatives
regard something as probable or likely
expects
.
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