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Most high-level positions in companies are filled by men even though the workforce in many developed countries is more than 50 percent female. Companies should be required to allocate a certain percent of these positions to women. do you agree?

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Despite being more than average in
workforce
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the workforce
, women are offered few golden opportunities as compared to men. In my opinion, a specific percentage of high
level
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 positions must be allocated to females. Due to awareness of rights, women now demand equality at every
level
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, which is legal and ethical, as they are equal to men in every aspect. Considering gender equality, women must be offered high
level
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 posts, as they posses creativity, which is same as man. As an illustration, MANY YOUNG GIRLS ARE EXCELLING IN FIELD OF INFORMATION TECHNOLOGY, WHICH WAS
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 a male dominated field.
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, they should be given
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higher
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 positions, as they deserve it. Women are considered as
multitaskers
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. They have special qualities of managing multiple activities as compared to men. To illustrate, a
statistics
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statistic
 revealed, working women are good at time management because they have to look after
home
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the home
 and workplace at the same time.
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, they tend to adjust in every environment. Psychologists believe, they have
special ability
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a special ability
special abilities
the special ability
 to cope up with difficulties. It is due to their innate abilities to
adopt
make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapt
 and adjust in
different environment
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a different environment
, they can tackle challenging situations.
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, due to strong personality and multitasking abilities, females are prime candidates for high
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 jobs,
on the contrary
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 to men. To conclude,
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 females
posses
have as an attribute, knowledge, or skill
possess
 a huge number in workforce, high
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 positions are still filled by men. In my view, considering skills,
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 as creativity and multitasking, a certain percentage of these positions must be allocated by companies to females.
This
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 trend will increase in foreseeable future.
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