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Many people are working at home rather than in the workplace. Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others suggest it will cause stress in the home. Discuss both side and your opinion.

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satisfaction
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 is one of the important aspects of everyone’s life. Generation to generation spends one-
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 of their lives working. So, it is always essential once
job
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 to be satisfied. In
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 essay, I will be contributing factors to
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satisfaction
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 and
also
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 show how real is the expectation of an employee is.
Job
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satisfaction
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 is the most crucial part
in
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of
employees
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the employees work atmosphere
work
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 atmosphere. And it’s not easy to get it. An employee can get
job
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satisfaction
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 from their manager’s response,
work
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 atmosphere, the
task there
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task, there
 are dealing with, wages
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 matters and numerous other factors like feeling positive about their
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 and making others feel happy about it. It is the worker right to get the prompt attention from his or her manager for any concern the employee is facing with.
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, doctors are usually satisfied with their
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, as there treat patients and make them well, which contributes to their
job
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satisfaction
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. Most employees expect their
job
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 to be well satisfied. People who spend hours and hours can get frustrated if there cannot find
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 in their jobs. It has been
seen especially
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seen, especially
 with the teachers, who find their
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 very comfortable and relaxing, as there are completely involved in their
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 field. And
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, enjoys their
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 to the fullest. In
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 cases, one will find, that there was expecting from the
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. It is
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 important for employees to choose a
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 where there can happily
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 and make the atmosphere happy.
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