The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closing of all shops in town and cities. Do you agree or disagree

At present fast growing market is purchasing goods through
internet
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the internet
because of many benefits
,
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,
but certain people
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that it's effecting to close many shops in
cities
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the cities
. I will argue that due to web
,
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,
retails malls not close in the towns.
Firstly
, Nowadays, many people are purchasing household and personal things through online shopping because there are many advantages are there like
time
saving, due to everyone busy in their schedules not
intersted
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
to go to regular shops for
items
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items, hence
hence
,
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,
placing orders through web
therefore
easily getting things to footsteps in
couple
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a couple
of hours
ratherthan
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rather than
to spend much
time
in travelling.
Secondly
, Choose different models
,
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,
through
electornic market
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electronic markets
electronic market
the electronic market
easily identifies
what ever
one or some or every or all without specification
whatever
they wanted in seconds and buying things through world wide.
For Example
,
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,
AS per latest CNN survey
,
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,
In Newyork 70% humans are buying Dress
,
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,
Televions
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
televisions
and sofas due to reduce the travel
time
and parking cost.
On the other hand
, mainly, due to globalization all the things are buying through laptops in sitting home
,
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,
however
, several public interested to go shopping because they can spend quality
time
with family like gatherings like eating food and most of the malls are providing
play area
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a play area
play areas
to
childerns
hence
they can spend
time
with physical
activites
any specific behavior
activities
. On the top that they can trail and choose product if it's suitable
to
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for
you or not.
For Instance
,
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,
In many developing countries like India and Brazil lot of malls cultures increased and revenue
is generating
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is generated
in
manyways
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many ways
. In conclusion, due to technology everyone is interested
to
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in
buying their needs from house to saving
time
and
money
Accept comma addition
money, however
however
familes
a social unit living together
families
are like shopping in malls because gatherings and enjoy
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the
time
with others.
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