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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosophy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximise chances of employment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's competitive era, education plays an indispensable role in each and every individual's life and in the growth of the country. Due to escalating
university
 fees and unemployment rates, many people think that
university
's should provide only practical courses rather than teaching theoretical subjects. I completely agree with the statement and will discuss in the upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, there would be multiple merits
for
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of
 the students who will learn practical skills or subjects in the
university
.
Firstly
, they will have great knowledge about their field as they are studying about their faculty from the
university
.
Secondly
, students will be very experienced they will not face any difficulty at workplace and would be more able to handle any adverse condition efficiency.
Moreover
, skills open a gateway of employment for a skilled person.
Furthermore
, if the graduates merely have bookish information they will not capable of working in office accurately as well as they will not have experience. Along with
this
, they will get depressed in intricate situations since they do not have practical knowledge. A survey was conducted on both people who did their graduation with practical subjects and others who gained only theoretical knowledge,
hence
 individuals are more successful who has abilities and skills. To conclude, nowadays in the modern world life skills is essential as they utilize the region of work and make
a person cofident
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a confident person
a person confident
 to cope with the competition.

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