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More and more people are working at home rather than in the workplace. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families, but others think it will bring stress to the home. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #home #workplace #workers #families #stress
Remote working is becoming more popular
now a days
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. With the advancement of
technology
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technology,
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office
 goers are preferring to
work
 from
home
 full time or part time rather than going to
work place
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workplace
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everyday
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. It has both advantages and disadvantages. Working from
home
 has its own advantages
such
 as commute time to
office
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the office
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is saved
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 which can be easily utilized to do household chores as well
putting
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 the same effort
for
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into
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work
.
Its
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 beneficial for both employer and employee. Employers don't have to reserve
a
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office
 space for the worker and
hence
 they can save
the
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money towards rental. Technology has advanced so much that meeting and conference calls can be taken from
home
with
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by
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 phone and video conference. There are
lot
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 of applications
such
 as Skype, Goto
meeting
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meetings
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are
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available which can be easily available on computers and
smart phones
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smartphones
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 to take
the
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office
 meetings
at
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in
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comfort
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the comfort
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 of their
home
. Doctors and medicine specialists are not behind the race
also
.
Now a days
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 many doctors provide consultation from their
home
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homes
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 with
help
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the help
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 of technologies
such
 as
tele-medicine
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telemedicine
 which is a boon for a patient.
On the other hand
, there are quite a few disadvantages of working from
home
. Even if the worker works from
home
 worker is still in a homely environment and there could be instances of disturbance from family members and children at
home
. He can never give his 100
percent
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 to
work
 when working from
home
. During a conference
call
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 there could be a chance of
back ground
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background
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 noise coming from pets and infants, which clearly breaks the continuity of the call. Many
a
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times employee has to put his hand on
house hold
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household
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 chores and it greatly impacts his or her productivity. There are numerous benefits of working from
home
however
, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 its better to visit
work
 place for
work
 where he or she can give his best to
work
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Telecommuting
  • Flexi-time
  • Remote work
  • Work-life integration
  • Virtual collaboration
  • Self-discipline
  • Workspace
  • Burnout
  • Ergonomics
  • Time management
  • Distractions
  • Productivity
  • Commuting
  • Connectivity issues
  • Team dynamics
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