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Employers should give long holidays to employees to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree.

#employers #holidays #employees #job
Providing employees with longer holidays would motivate them to
work
 better. I agree with that statement and
this
 essay, I will support my view with examples.
To begin
 with, people
work
 more efficiently after a certain amount of break time. Researches show that people who
work
 with the rest do the job better than people who
work
 without rest. It is all because of a human mind structure. Non resting brains,
consequently
, leads to the inefficiency of the
work
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work
 jointly with their bosses and
as a result
, the job would be done better than before. idfjuidjfhsduifjdshzfijiofjisjdzj i uifdx guh dfg d g ghudfgh gugnzu hug zhs gd fghfdhg ug fguh guh uhg uh ozghijg zis o g ushzdghuihguhsdf
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this
 approach is very beneficial.
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