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Employers should give long holidays to employees to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree or disagree.

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Providing employees with longer holidays would motivate them to
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 better. I agree with that statement and
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 with, people
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 more efficiently after a certain amount of break time. Researches show that people who
work
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 with the rest do the job better than people who
work
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 without rest. It is all because of a human mind structure. Non resting brains,
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 jointly with their bosses and
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