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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think this is good. Others thinks face to face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many scholars tend to believe that the platform, to make new friends, provided by social networking sites and internet chat group is commendable. While others opine that
face
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 to
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interaction
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 holds massive importance in making new
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friendship
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friends
. In my opinion,
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 to
face
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interaction
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 does greater good
to provide
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provide
strong foundation
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a strong foundation
 and sustainability of new
friendship
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. Social networking sites have time and again proven to be
boon
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a boon
 for connecting with new individuals.
Personality
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The personality
 of an individual is reflected through statuses, comments and photos.
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, if
wavelength
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the wavelength
 matches, they eventually happen to be friends.
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, the group of people with similar interests are often
member
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members
a member
 of the same group
in
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of
 social sites. In 2015, when massive earthquake of 7.8 Richter hit Nepal, 1,200 members of sisterhood Nepal got to know each other and came forth for the greater good of
nation
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the nation
a nation
.
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, to be friends
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 to
face
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interaction
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 is utmost necessary. Through messages sent from internet, it is almost impossible to transfer the evoked emotions, which is the essence of any kind of friendships. ‘I love you’ or ‘I am there for you’ in chat boxes will never have the same impact as when someone says it
upfront
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up front
, right in
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face
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the face
. Small gestures while having coffee together or unpredicted high- fives or just a simple hug or any other comforting body language are the memories that friends are going to cherish forever. The effect of which will have lasting impact on any
friendship
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. All in all, social networking sites
does assist
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do assist
individual
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individuals
the individual
 in making new friends, to a small extent. But the impact that
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 to
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interaction
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 brings along is beyond comparison. The essence of
friendship
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 like reciprocating emotions while interacting will have greater effect when the person is present physically as opposed to online
interaction
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