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It has been seen that these days, some workplaces tend to employ equal numbers of men and women workers. Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

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In present modern era male and female are considered equally and they get equal opportunities in
ever
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
 field of
life
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.
Form
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From
 my
perceptive
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perception
 it is a positive growth of females that they get
same offers
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the same offers
 in
life
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 as the men get in
there
of them or themselves
their
 lives. Nowadays it is in a trend in fewer companies females and male's both genders are working in a same number.
To begin
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 with,
firstly
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 from my point of
view it
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view, it
 is
a
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an
 optimistic growth of women that they are getting equality and respect
on
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in
 their
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
.
Secondly
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, women
becomes
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become
 independent and they started earning
same salary
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the same salary
 which the men got from their employers.
Furthermore
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, by giving the chance to women to show their abilities that's faith boosted the moral of every
women
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woman
 and
that is
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 the reason you can now see the women's at different places working together with men's like in
space shuttle
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a space shuttle
the space shuttle
space shuttles
, in big MNC
,
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,
s and in army forces
also
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. It is proved that females are equally capable of doing every task of
life
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 by themselves. To put it in the nutshell, I pen down by saying that, females have
lot
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lots
 of family responsibilities and they have less time to work on themselves but despite of all the hurdles and hectic
work schedule they
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work schedule, they
 show
lot
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lots
 of courage, strength and positive attitude towards
life
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 and
that is
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 the major reason that they are equal in numbers compared to men at
same companies
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the same companies
.

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