In many cities the use of video cameras in public places is being increased in order to reduce crime, but some people believe that these measures restrict our individual freedom. Do the benefits of increased security outweigh the drawbacks?

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There are more and more cities where the
used
a person who makes use of a thing; someone who uses or employs something
user
of
video
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cameras has increased to stop the crimes, but there are people that think that
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is a way of restricting the people freedom. The increase of
video
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cameras in cities can give people a
felling
the experiencing of affective and emotional states
feeling
of safety, they can think that if something is going on somebody will help them
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faster
.
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A couple
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connects a noun with the preceding word
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years ago was on TV
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a small town in
UK
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the UK
the
video
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cameras saw on a
banch
a long seat for more than one person
bench
in
park
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the park
a park
a teddy bear that was there for days and days. The people took it to the
next
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level and they checked the teddy bear and after
that police
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that, police
got involved and they discovered that inside of it were drugs. Having more
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cameras in towns will maybe
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the
crimial
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
rates as they can be intimidated by
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this cameras
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this camera
these cameras
knowing that police is looking and checking them. People may
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undergo an emotional sensation or be in a particular state of mind
feel
that they are over
controlled but
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controlled, but
in a world that the crime rates are going higher and higher the increase of
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cameras is becoming a
necesity
the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessity
. Overall the world is changing and people need to understand that safety
majors
any maneuver made as part of progress toward a goal
measures
are increasing as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Surveillance cameras
  • Public safety
  • Deterrent
  • Evidence collection
  • Apprehend perpetrators
  • Public spaces
  • Invasion of privacy
  • Civil liberties
  • Abuse of power
  • Misuse
  • Cost implications
  • Monitoring
  • Maintenance
  • Essential services
  • Justice system
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