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My name is Anindya Paul. I live in India. I am a startup enthusiast. I am working on a startup Idea with Atmadeep Das. Our goal is to help student prepare for IELTS/TOEFL and other english language proficiency exams. We are also developing a product to help universities attract right student and shorten the overall admission cycle. Atmadeep lives in France. France is a nice country.

My name is Anindya Paul. I live in India. I am a startup enthusiast. I am working on a startup Idea with Atmadeep Das. Our goal is to help
student
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students
the student
 prepare for IELTS/TOEFL and other
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 language proficiency exams. We are
also
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 developing a product to help universities attract right student and shorten the overall admission cycle.
Atmadeep
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 lives in France. France is a nice
country
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. There are 500 countries in the
world
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. USA is the biggest
economy
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.
USA
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The USA economy
economy
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 is a
consumption
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 based
economy
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.
Economy
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 means the state of a
country
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 or region in terms of the production and
consumption
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 of goods and services and the supply of money. In
consumption
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 driven
economy
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, consumer brand building is an important factor for doing business. China is a production driven
economy
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. Chinese production costs are lowest in the
world
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. China
have
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has
 the highest
population
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 in the
world
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. Total
population
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 in the word is 7 BN.
Population
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 control is one of the biggest
problem
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problems
 in the
world
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.
Population
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 is not evenly distributed.
Philippines
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The Philippines
 has one of the highest
population
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 density in the
world
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. Philippines is a
consumption
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 driven
economy
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. The culture of
Philippines
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the Philippines
 is borrowed from
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the USA
, as it was an earlier colony. Culture is an important building block of any
country
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. Education, together with culture,
help
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helps
 develop a sense of unity and responsibility among the
population
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. China and India are two of the highest growing major
economy
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 of the
world
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. Both the countries are dependent on the size of their
population
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. Higher
population
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 creates more demand and
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 augments the GDP of any
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. The presence of a strong education system is a boon for any
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. In Germany education is free and sponsored by state government. To study in Germany, one has to learn German. Learning German is not complex. There are tons of institutes in India who teaches foreign languages. Apart from physical institutes there are web applications, which does the same. The above text was used to check if
hemingwayapp
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 can measure coherence of the articles. It is found that the app
doesnt
does not
doesn't
 measure it.
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,
this
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 is an excellent and simple application to check individual sentence construction.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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