The charts below shows the value of one country’s exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the percentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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of country's export values

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2015 to 2016 and

below

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the percentage

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change in each

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exports

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earninga

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earnings

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came from Petroleum and Engineered goods.In 2016 petroleum percentage

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increased

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engineered goods rises by 8.5% in 2016. Compared to the Gems and

jewellary

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jewellery

exports

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decrease

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decreased

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by 5.18% in 2016

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earning of $43

billions

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copmared

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compared

to Agriculture products was maintained

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lower amount in both

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years

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growth

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0.8% in 2016.

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range and approximately changed in 2016

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%31 billion and

inceased

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increased

by 15.24% in 2016.

Mon Nov 11 2019

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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 2 times.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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3 paragraphs

114 words

5.50

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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