The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the number of male and female research
students
who studied six different science courses at
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United
Kingdom based
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University in 2009. (25)
Overall
, the number of both male and female research
students
was the highest in Biology. In comparison, the
proportion
of male
students
(230) was higher than female
students
(200) for the same subject. A similar trend with
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difference in the
proportion
of male and female
students
was recorded for Physics.
Moreover
, exactly
tripled
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number
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of male
students
(150)
studied
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Astronomy as compared to female
students
(50). A slight difference, about 25, between male and female
students
was seen for both Biology and Medicine.
However
, male
students
dominated
in
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both of these courses. Veterinary medicine was the only subject in which the
proportion
of female
students
(120) exceeded the male
students
(90). (112) In conclusion, the
proportion
of research
students
fluctuated in all the subjects, but a massive gap between male and female
students
was found in Physics. (24)
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