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The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The chart demonstrates the number of male and female research
students
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 who studied six different science courses at
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 United
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 University in 2009. (25)
Overall
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, the number of both male and female research
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 was the highest in Biology. In comparison, the
proportion
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 of male
students
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 (230) was higher than female
students
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 (200) for the same subject. A similar trend with
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 difference in the
proportion
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 of male and female
students
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 was recorded for Physics.
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, exactly
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number
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 of male
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 (150)
studied
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who studied
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 Astronomy as compared to female
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 (50). A slight difference, about 25, between male and female
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 was seen for both Biology and Medicine.
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, male
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 dominated
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both of these courses. Veterinary medicine was the only subject in which the
proportion
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 of female
students
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 (120) exceeded the male
students
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 (90). (112) In conclusion, the
proportion
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 of research
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 fluctuated in all the subjects, but a massive gap between male and female
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 was found in Physics. (24)

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