The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the proportion of male and female students studying six art-related subjects at a UK university in 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart demonstrates the number of male and female
students
who studied six different art courses at
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Kingdom based
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University in 2011. (24)
Overall
, the number of both male and female
students
was the highest for English language and Literature. In comparison, the
proportion
of female
students
(250) was slightly higher than male
students
(230) for the same subject. A similar trend with
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difference in the
proportion
of male and female
students
was recorded for Linguistics.
Moreover
, exactly
tripled
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of female
students
(150) studied philosophy as compared to male
students
(50). A slight difference, about 10, between male and female
students
was seen for both History and Archeology or Communication and Media studies.
However
, female
students
dominated
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both of these courses. Art and design was the only subject in which the
proportion
of male
students
(180) exceeded the female
students
(160). (121) In conclusion, the
proportion
of research
students
fluctuated in all the subjects, but a massive gap between male and female
students
was found in philosophy. (25)
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  • proportion
  • art-related subjects
  • gender distribution
  • predominate
  • significant
  • gender imbalances
  • percentages
  • comparison
  • balanced distribution
  • data
  • figures
  • trends
  • popular
  • least popular
  • subject choices
  • analyze
  • overview
  • summarize
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