The chart below shows the proportion of males and females in Malaysia who commonly do physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.

The chart below shows the proportion of males and females in Malaysia who commonly do physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where necessary.
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The chart compares the percentage of Malaysian
men
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and
women
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in six
age
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groups who did
physical
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exercise on regular basis in the year 2010. (25) In the youngest
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group (15 to 24), almost 52% of Malaysian
men
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but only around 47% of
women
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involved themselves in regular physical activity in 2010.
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, between the ages of 25 and 44,
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were much less active on average than
women
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. In comparison, in the 35 to 44
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group, only 39.5% of males did some form of regular exercise, compared to 52% of females. Between the ages of 45 and 64, the figure for male physical activity rose significantly to around 45%,
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the proportion of active females still remained 8% higher, at 53%.
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, the ratio of both genders with
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65 and over was almost identical, at approximately 47%. (115) The proportion of Malaysian males and females doing regular physical exercise fluctuated depending on their ages, but
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dominated over
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for all the
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groups except (15 to 24). (30)
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Vocabulary: Replace the words men, women, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • gender distribution
  • physical activity
  • age group
  • percentage
  • comparative analysis
  • peak levels
  • notable differences
  • trends
  • discrepancies
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