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Nowadays people make new friends through social media and internet chat groups. Some people think it is a good idea. Other think that face to face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The technological advancement plays a crucial role in peoples'
communication
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 as it does in many parts of our lifestyle and it has become a common practice among people to build new friendships via digital media. It is stated that the internet is the best method to make new relationships, while others insist that the real world interaction is
irreplacable
impossible to replace
irreplaceable
. Both sides of
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 controversial issue will be discussed in
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 essay and a final conclusion will be drawn. On the one hand, people argue
taht
pointing out something
that
 the use of social media for the purpose of making new relationships have made our life
more easier
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easier
. By means of a variety of
mobil
migratory
mobile
 applications and websites people spend less time to contact with each other than they used to several decades ago. Needless to say, they do not need to travel long distances to see each other to have a conversation.
Furhtermore
in addition
Furthermore
, the digital world
make
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makes
 a way particularly for introvert people to express their feelings, emotions and ideas more easily and without getting stressed behind the keyboard compared to face-to-face interaction.
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, it is believed that the
communication
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 over social networking can never be considered as a complete replacement for
communication
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 in person. The conventional method of earning new friend is regarded as a more
favorible
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 option to make a strong and long-lasting
relationships
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relationship
,
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, the identity of unfamiliar person can never be totally trustful, which makes it dangerous to share your personal information with them via internet. It can result in undesirable consequences,
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 as loosing money from a bank account in case of giving access to
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 unknown people for the relevant information. In conclusion, the
conveniency
the state of being suitable or opportune
convenience
convenient
 and easy to use behaviour of the social media as a
communication
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 tool is undeniable,
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 is has a hazardous effects in some cases. In my view, the internet must continue to be
cautiosuly
as if with kid gloves; with caution or prudence or tact
cautiously
 employed to befriend with new people.
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