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Nowadays children watch a lot of TV and play video games. However, some people think that these activities are not good for a child's mental health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The diagram shows a process for producing electricity for home use. The equipment consists of a large
tank
, boxes and pipes that would be able to fit into a garage-sized room. Electricity is produced using methane gas, generated from a mix of compost and water in a large steel
tank
. The
tank
 is about the same height as a person and about twice as wide. Methane
rises
Suggestion
rise
 to the top of the
tank
 and is collected and stored in a gas storage system. The stored gas is the fuel source used in the
energy
 conversions that happen
next
. Once compressed in a gas compressor, the methane fuels a combustion engine, which in turn produces mechanical
energy
. Having been transferred to a generator, the mechanical
energy
 is
then
 transformed into electrical
energy
, which is
then
 stored in a battery. At
this
 stage the electricity is ready for home use.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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