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Some people believe that traditional music album and single consumption is vital for the music industry. On the other hand, others think that digital streaming and downloading play bigger roles. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Music
 is essential to
rejuveniate
cause (a stream or river) to erode, as by an uplift of the land
rejuvenate
 the minds of people from their hectic schedules. Some individual who thinks that old-type of
music
 albums and single consumption is better for
music industry
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the music industry
,
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,
while others opine that modern
music
such
 as concerts and live performances and downloading the
music
 from internet plays
huge role
Suggestion
a huge role
.
This
 essay
willl
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 discuss both the views of the statement along with suitable opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
music
 has been an
indespensible
not to be dispensed with; essential
indispensable
 part of human
lives
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life
 from
century
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a century
centuries
 long as it provides feeling and thoughts in the form songs to them which they only express with it. In ancient days
,
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,
people
does not have
Suggestion
do not have
 enough sources to relax themselves so they used to listen
music
.
For example
,
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,
in ancient times
,
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,
religious and
meaninful
having a meaning or purpose
meaningful
 songs were recorded by people which were listen by everyone on different occasion and they were sold in the form of
cassetes
a container that holds a magnetic tape used for recording or playing sound or video
cassettes
 which they put in a recorder or radio system.
On the contrary
, advancement in technology has brought significant changes in the
music
 industry. As earlier people used to listen
music
 by buying
cassetes
pecuniary reimbursement to the winning party for the expenses of litigation
costs
cassettes
.
Thesedays
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These days
, a person can attend
live concert
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a live concert
 of his favourite singer and can enjoy his performance.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
One can enjoy
music
 by downloading the track from
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 which is the cheapest way to listen
music
. In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
Digital streaming is much better than traditional
music
 as it is time-saving and cost-effective. A person can enjoy his favourite track at anytime and anywhere.It
act
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acts
 as a
stressbuster
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stress buster
. To conclude, Traditional
music
 is popular in older times when people used to have
large amount
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a large amount
 of
time but
Accept comma addition
time, but
 now as time has been changed so it is required to
tranfrom
subject to a mathematical transformation
transform
 the way we used to listen
music
.

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