The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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bar graph illustrates computer ownership by education level between 2002 and 2020 measured by percentage. In 2010, no high
school
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was lower than a high
school
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graduate
diploma
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.
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, in 2002, the figure for
bachelor
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's
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degree
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was more than a college (incomplete) at 90%,
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and 85
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% respectively the
trend
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of
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bachelor
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's
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degree
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degrees
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. Reminded nearly stable between 2010 at 90% and 2002 at 70%. Focusing on 2010, no high
school
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diploma
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was much more than
2002
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in 2002
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at 40% and 15% respectively. Moving on
postgraduate
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to postgraduate
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qualification
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, in 2010, the
trend
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increased to approximately
once fold
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at 95%, compared to 2002, where it was at 75%.
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, the figure for high
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graduate
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in 2010, was about double times as much as no high
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diploma
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at 70% and 39% respectively.
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,
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overall
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an overall
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postgraduate
qualification
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in 2010, was the greatest,
while
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the same survey in 2020 was the largest in the education level of computer ownership.
This
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bar graph illustrates computer ownership by education level between 2002 and 2020 measured by percentage. In 2010, no high
school
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was lower than a high
school
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graduate
diploma
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.
However
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, in 2002, the figure for
bachelor
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's
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degree
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degrees
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was more than a college (incomplete) at 90%,
85
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and 85
show examples
% respectively the
trend
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of
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for
show examples
bachelor
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's
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degree
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degrees
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. Reminded nearly stable between 2010 at 90% and 2002 at 70%. Focusing on 2010, no high
school
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diploma
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was much more than
2002
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in 2002
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at 40% and 15% respectively. Moving on
postgraduate
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to postgraduate
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qualification
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, in 2010, the
trend
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increased to approximately
once fold
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once-fold
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at 95%, compared to 2002, where it was at 75%.
To sum up
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,
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overall
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an overall
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postgraduate
qualification
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, overall, to sum up".
Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words school, diploma, bachelor, degree, trend, qualification with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the ninth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consistent increase
  • growing reliance on technology
  • clear correlation
  • digital divide
  • notable growth
  • most pronounced disparity
  • gap reduced considerably
  • percentage growth
  • higher educational levels
  • educational groups
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