Employers should give longer holidays to employees to encourage them to do their job well. Do you agree?

longer
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Longer
breaks from
work
given by employers to increase the productivity of workers is not proved beneficial all the
time
. I partly agree with
this
point as
motive
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the motive
a motive
behind working is different for everyone.
some
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Some
work
for monetary benefits while others for some social aspects
.
Accept space
.
To begin
,
Accept space
,
long break from
work
may help an individual to maintain balance between family and
work
. People can spend more
time
with friends and family.
Moreover
,
Accept space
,
they can even focus on their other interest areas like adventurous trips. It has been observed that sufficient intervals help people to relax and come up with innovative ideas to
inplement
apply in a manner consistent with its purpose or design
implement
and get a chance to explore the beautiful places of
world
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the world
. It has
also
been observed that
discontinuity
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the discontinuity
of
work
for
long interval
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long intervals
a long interval
of
time
may create unhappiness or sadness among
people
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the people
.
Majority
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The majority
of people come to meet and live
social life
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a social life
the social life
with colleagues. A long rest may develop lonely feeling
.
Accept space
.
Few of them even get
demotivated
towards their
work
which can affect the productivity that will ultimately bring delay in completion of
project
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the project
. Lack of concentration in
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
is
also
a major drawback. Employees take
long
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a long time
time
to settle back
to
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into
their back
.
Accept space
.
To conclude, enough number of holidays can build interest towards by achieving the balance in
work
and family
.
Accept space
.
Adequate holidays are essential for human well
neing
the state or fact of existing
being
as it
enhance
Suggestion
enhances
work
life balance. On the other side,
disadvantages
Suggestion
the disadvantages
of the same cannot be ignored as no employer can take the risk of inefficiency among workers.

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