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The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.

The line graph shows the number of books that were borrowed in four different months in 2014 from four village libraries, and the pie chart shows the percentages of books, by type, that were borrowed over this time.
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The given line graph compares the information about the
quantity
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number
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 of
books
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 which were borrowed from village libraries over the 4-
month
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 period in 2014.
Overall
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, the most significant fact to emerge from the line graph is that Church Mount was the least common
library
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that
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where
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 readers
borrowed
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who borrowed
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books
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 over the given time frame. The level of RyeSlip
library
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 was the highest , with
the
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apply
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300
books
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 in June.
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 ,
this
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 figure decreased by approximately 120
books
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 over the examined period. The utilization of
books
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 from Sutton Wood
library
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 increased slightly over the
next
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month
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.
While
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this
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 figure declined significantly between July and August, it soared steeply from August to September. The rate of Sutton Wood
library
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 increased by 50
books
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 over the 4-
month
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 period.
In contrast
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, as regards the levels of West Eaton and Church Mount , both figures experienced a similar trend.
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 both of
figures
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 lent only 50
books
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 in June, till August they went up by 100
books
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 and around 70
books
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,
accordingly
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. Over the following
month
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, the of West Eaton levelled out;
however
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, the level of Church Mount increased , with the rate ending up at 150
books
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 in September.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, month, library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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