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The diagrams below contain information regarding percentages of people occupied in various types of position in 1999 and 2001. write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

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The given diagrams present information about the employment proportion of different position during period of two years 1999 and 2001. It can be clearly seen from the proportion of full time job had the highest figures in both years. According to what is shown, the casual work was the lowest worked types in 2001 nearly about 3%, while the lowest worked job in 1999 was the unemployed type exactly 2%. In 1999 and 2001, the part time position was common among the people, which about of a quarter of the people were working in that type.
In addition
, In 1999 the contract was occupied by 12% of the people while the percentage significantly improved to about 17% in 2001.The highest proportion in both years 1999 and 2001 was reported in full hour work 37 and 26%, respectively.
Moreover
, In both years self-employed had recorded nearly same percentage 19%. To sum up, we could say that the most popular type of the job was the full hour in comparison the lowest was casual.
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