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The diagrams below contain information regarding percentages of people occupied in various types of position in 1998 and 2001. Write a report for a university tutor describing the information shown.

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The two charts describe the number of people in various types of employment (
casual
Suggestion
casually
, unemployed, full
time
 job, part-
time
 job, self-employed and contract) in 1998 and 2001. It is clear that the majority of people held a full
time
 position in both 1998 and 2001. In 1998 full
time
 workers were the largest group (at 37%), followed by people working part-
time
 jobs (27%), self-employed (19%) and contract workers (12%). Casual labourers and the unemployed made up only 3% and 2% of the workforce, respectively. In 2001,
although
 full
time
 position holders were still the majority, their proportion dropped to 28% and that of part-
time
 workers – to 20%. The proportion of self-employed remained at 19%, but the number of contract workers’ noticeably increased to 18%. Another significant increase was in the proportion of unemployed, which grew more than threefold to 7% in 2001. Casual workers’ share seemed to stay unchanged at 3%, making them the smallest group in the workforce. Overall, the charts demonstrate a trend of people leaving full-
time
 employment and the growing unemployment.
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